Travel writing - Publicity text/leaflet for attractions of Rochdale
This evidence of a pupil's work in writing and the teacher's assessment exemplifies the level judgement of a pupil working at low level 4 in Year 9.
This publicity piece for Rochdale develops some relevant points (AF1) covering shops, places to eat out and leisure opportunities, but tends to provide lists rather than persuasive detail. A consistent viewpoint is maintained (AF2), using direct address to the reader, but with only limited consideration of a possible range of interests (AF1). Ideas are clustered into paragraphs (AF3) and sometimes built around a topic sentence (AF4), but with little elaboration or detail. The opening adopts an appropriate style and there is some attempt to create an appropriate ending (AF3). At sentence level, there is some evidence of sentence variation (AF5), through the use of connectives like ‘if', but sentence construction is not always secure, not all sentences are demarcated accurately and there is little use of punctuation within sentences (AF6). There is some expansion of general vocabulary to match the topic and occasionally some evidence of deliberate vocabulary choices, e.g. ‘stylish girl', ‘gorgeouse burgers’ (AF7). There are a number of spelling errors in common grammatical function words and some phonetically plausible spelling.
For most of the assessment focuses, there is evidence that the level 4 criteria are being met here, although more securely at whole-text than at sentence/word level.