Crooked carnival (imaginative)
This evidence of a pupil's work in writing and the teacher's assessment exemplifies the level judgement of a pupil working at low level 4 in Year 8.
The ‘dramatic’ nature of this narrative is signalled by an appropriate opening (AF3) and an attempt to indicate form and purpose to the reader (AF2). A straightforward record of what happens is presented from a generally consistent viewpoint (AF1) in paragraphs that cluster together related points (AF3), although with few internal links other than some use of pro-nouns (AF4). Sentence structures are invariably straightforward in form, making use mainly of the simple past tense (AF5), but usually accurately demarcated with some use of speech punctuation where appropriate (AF6). Occasionally words are selected for effect (AF7) and there is correct spelling of most common grammatical words (AF8).
Across all the assessment focuses, it is the level 3 criteria that are fulfilled, although some aspects of structure begin to address level 4 criteria.