AF5
Pupil B has used a range of structures in this collection. While there is some awkwardness and loss of control at times, he has mostly used them in a controlled way appropriate to the purpose and form of writing. He has also used other sentence features, including extended phrases and adverbials, for precision and emphasis. Overall, there is enough evidence to award level 6 for this assessment focus.
AF6
There is evidence of progression in punctuation, with the earlier work providing more evidence of attainment at level 5 than at level 6. In the later pieces Pupil B's sentence punctuation becomes more secure and he begins to use punctuation within sentences for clarity and effect. On balance, there is sufficient evidence to award level 6 for this assessment focus.
AF3
In most pieces, particularly the later ones, Pupil B has managed the overall structure quite confidently, with ideas sequenced appropriately for the reader and organised effectively into paragraphs. The openings are generally strong, clarifying the purpose and theme of the writing, with the endings generally providing an effective conclusion. Pupil B has fulfilled the level 6 criteria for this assessment focus.
AF4
Pupil B has used paragraphs confidently to structure ideas across texts and has linked his points within sections or paragraphs. At times there is evidence to meet some of the criteria for level 6. However, cohesion is not always as fluent as it might be and, in general, the work mostly shows evidence of level 5. Overall, a best-fit judgement for this assessment focus is level 5.
AF1
Pupil B has selected and developed ideas appropriate to the task and in the three later pieces he has begun to develop material with some skill and imagination. Similarly, although the viewpoint is slightly uncertain in the first piece, it becomes more secure in the later pieces, with the last two pieces showing he can manage multiple viewpoints fairly effectively. On balance, Pupil B has fulfilled enough of the criteria across a range of writing for level 6 to be awarded.
AF2
Pupil B has shown he can write appropriately for purpose and audience and can select relevant stylistic features to support his purpose across a range of text types. While there are elements of uncertainty about audience in the first pieces, towards the end of the collection he is more confident in writing with the reader in mind. He securely fulfils the criteria for level 6 for this assessment focus.
AF7
Pupil B has a wide vocabulary and his use of technical and subject-specific vocabulary is particularly strong, as evidenced in the essay about football and the piece about earthquakes. He is also beginning to use a wider vocabulary in his narrative writing, and is therefore awarded level 6 for this assessment focus.
AF8
Much of Pupil B's spelling is accurate, including complex words and subject-specific vocabulary. There are errors, although they are often phonetically plausible, and he has made minor slips by not checking his work carefully. Overall, he fulfils the criteria for level 6.
