Notes describing fire engine
Children worked in pairs talking about a picture of the fire engine before writing their own notes. In the whole-class discussion the teacher prompted children to think about different aspects of the engine – size, colour, what it looked like – and ways of making descriptions come alive through comparisons.
Tahmid's notes show his ability to make use of the suggested approach. He has described the engine's size, colour and appearance, expanding his notes around the picture into fuller sentences.
- In this brief piece of work assessment comments are made in relation to AF5, AF1 and AF7.
- At sentence level Tahmid uses the verbs 'is' and 'has' appropriately for the genre (AF5 L2 b3).
- The main interest is that words are chosen thoughtfully and with some precision to create an interesting description, for example 'it is shiny silver black', 'big as three cars together', 'shiny blue light like a river', 'it has stripes like a tiger' (AF1 L2 b2 and AF7 L2 b2).