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APP writing standards file: Daniel (Year 1, high level 2)

Letter writing

This letter was written in response to one received from Bob the Builder, asking children to find out how many litres of water it would take to fill a duck pond. Daniel wrote this letter in the child-initiated writing area, completely unaided.

The first page of Daniel's letter. The second page of Daniel's letter.

Bob the Builder © 2008/2009 HIT Entertainment Limited and Keith Chapman. All rights reserved. Used with kind permission.

Assessment commentary

  • Varied sentence openings, simple and complex sentences ('…when…', '…as well as…'). Alternating statements and questions effective in context, with past and present tenses accurate (AF5 L3 b1 and b2).
  • Straightforward sentences accurately demarcated with capital letters, full stops and question marks, one example of ellipsis (AF6 L3 b1).
  • Simple letter layout, text is structured around series of questions. Appropriate beginning and end (AF3 L3 b1, b2 and b3).
  • Although Daniel is not using paragraphs, ideas are grouped by content, e.g. feelings on receiving the letter, filling the duck pond and finally moving on to the welfare of the ducks (AF4 L2 b1).
  • Ideas are relevant, some repetition (AF1 L2 b1). Brief comments and questions convey personal viewpoint, e.g. 'I felt very very very excited', 'Don’t worry Bob we'll try' (AF1 L2 b3).
  • Although fairly brief, there is a clear purpose to the letter: to communicate with Bob about the duck pond. It includes some features of the form, e.g. opening greeting and sign-off, and Daniel writes in an appropriate conversational style, addressing Bob by name several times (AF2 L3 b1, b2 and b3).
  • Vocabulary is simple, but effective in context (AF7 L3 b1).
  • High-frequency grammatical function words, 'when', 'that', 'how', and some content words, 'duck', 'jug', are spelt correctly. Phonetic attempts to represent vowel digraphs (AF8 L2 b1 and b2).
  • Letters are correctly shaped and formed, but with some inconsistencies in size. Ascenders and descenders are distinguished (Handwriting L2 b1 and b2).

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